A college essay that you will love

When i was told to write an essay that i would have to send away to colleges about something important in my life, this little hobby of ours popped into my head immediatly. Keep in mind this is only the first draft, with LOTS of revision needed down the road (something we modelers understand very well!) I understand it is kinda lenghty, but if you stick with it, im sure you will love it! feel free to ass or critique anything!

Life in a Smaller Scale

It may, from the perspective from someone on the outside, seem strange for a person’s hobby to swallow up so much of their lives. For me, however, that perceived strangeness was never a consideration when I took up model building. Over the course of six years, the hobby transformed itself from slapping the ill-fitting parts of an obsolete Revell 1/48 scale Huey attack helicopter together on the floor of my Uncle Pete’s apartment one Easter Sunday to a lifelong passion for historical authenticity, machine engineered detailing parts, and smooth-as-glass paint jobs with realistic and carefully applied weathering effects. Looking back, I do not think it was the builder who transformed the models, but the models themselves that transformed the builder into who he is today.

When I started out snapping pieces of poorly molded plastic parts off their trees (called sprues) on my first kits, I had no idea that my life will be changed forever. What started out as something fun to pass the time quickly snow-balled its way into becoming a passion. As the number of kits in my “completed” pile grew, my skills grew exponentially (although no modeler can say that his completed pile is anywhere close to being the size of his to-do pile without being labeled a liar!). In the past I had allowed the kit to “build me,” but it wasn’t long before I began to “build the kit;” that is, not letting the manufacturers shortcomings dominate the result of the overall build. Soon, I grew tired of the cheap kits available on the shelves of a local Michaels arts-and-crafts store and traveled to a hobby shop, where I picked up my first armor build.

I guess you can say the hobby didn’t grow into a full-fledged obsession until I picked up that kit: a 1/48 scale M26 Pershing tank made by the world renowned, Japanese manufacturer known as Tamiya. On that model, I began to master the use of an airbrush; a temperamental little device that must have perfect conditions of paint viscosity, air pressure, distance from the model, and room temperature. Needles to say it took a great deal of patience (and many jars of paint, thinner, and pieces of cardboard) until I got good results! I also began a great deal of research about the vehicle that I was building, as the story of any tank truly fascinates me. I learned the essentials- its speed, suspension system, gun size, and crew capacity- from a small window on the inside of the instructions. However, I wanted to know more. After purchasing book after book, along with a great deal of time on the wonderful internet, I began to feed my knowledge of the tank- was it a successful design? Could it contend with its adversaries? What made it perform poorly? What made it perform superiorly? I also began to communicate with members of the hobby around the world using online forums (armorama.com, missing-lynx.com, and finescale.com, to name a few). I found a gold-mine of information not only about how to get a certain effect, but about history as well. It was here that I learned painting techniques to aid in airbrushing, applying weathering effects like washes, pigments, and filters, along with how to make an accurate scale replica from what was originally intended to be a toy.

It is difficult to begin to list all the skills modeling has taught me, because there are just so many! The most obvious is patience; no technique on any model was successful on its first try (let alone the third!), and almost all were learned over the course of many, many failed attempts. Modeling has taught me to “think on the fly-” to come up with solutions to problems to improve, revise, and substitute parts and details on my kits. Sometimes, the parts I am given are inadequate, or just plain don’t fit right, and a new solution has to be devised. It has taught me resourcefulness as many of the tools I use to get great results are simple, common house hold materials, like a clear acrylic used to give tile floors a shine. Modeling has taught me to see the big picture just by looking at a box full of parts, as well as an attention to detail and being able to look at things from a different perspective. Perhaps the most interesting skill modeling has taught me was to be able to analyze the kit piece by piece, which in turn made me analyze the actual vehicle. Often I clean up a part and think “what the heck is this?” and follow up with a bit of research to find out what that part actually did. Modeling has also taught me to plan ahead- do I have the supplies I need? How can I make this model look as if it just came ashore on a beach? Lastly, and possibly the most important, is self discipline. Sometimes, despite our best efforts, a build goes south and the builder is enthralled in a myriad of issues. Modeling has tough me when everything seems to go wrong, to take a step back, think, analyze, problem solve, and overcome the issues at hand.

Even though my life has benefited so largely from the modeling hobby, I cannot reciprocate and ensure the safety of the hobby into the future. Sadly, it is losing the battle for the interests of youths to more instantly gratifying activities such as high-tech video games. I cant even safely say that my future will be filled with boxes of Japanese plastic parts and jars of accurately researched modeling paint as I enter a new chapter of my life, where most of my time (not to mention money) will be devoted to a college education and starting up a family. And even when I do return to my X-acto knife and airbrush, I cannot guarantee that my own children will be as passionate for the hobby as I was when I was their age. I can only pray that the hobbies they choose are as beneficial to their lives as modeling was to mine.

Wow! that is a great essay A+ for sure! Not only does it explain your love of the hobby but more importantly, it shows that you are capable of doing very hard tasks with little effort because of the lessons modeling has gave you such as paying attention to detail. Colleges will look at this and say " This guy is a hard worker".

Essays for me is such a pain even if I’m in enriched, but you polished yours with like 3000 grit! Great job!

Does this mean you’re graduating from high school soon?

Wow, thats awesome. i like. never been good at essays. but thats one i like

Nice! I’m looking forward to the day I’m finally given the opportunity in school to write an essay on modeling. The only revision i should recommend is emphasizing the number of models in “the stash”… it could add another bit of humor… But beautifully done!

Thankyou guys! Writing has always been pretty easy for me. cant say the same about matyh, however [:D]

I still have one more year of high school to go!

Love the essay, and love your english skills(seriously you words flow together real nice![Y]) So can you/are you allowed to include things with the written portion, if possible I’d suggest making a small collage(picture collection) of your finished builds and including it on a seperate sheet. (Yes, I did a collage for one highly-acclaimed school when I was applying for schools, and yes I believe it did help me get accepted.)

Nice structure, form, and flow to your essay–I love to write as well, and appreciate a well-written piece like yours.

Make sure you let us know your grade! [:D]

From the modeller in me: Great essay… I likehow you have linked your model building hobby to positive aspects of your life as a whole.

From the college professor in me: If this is where your writing stands as an incoming student, you are in good shape. The essay itself has some technical issues, however your writing skills are definately superior to many (perhaps most) of your peers. Good work. You’d get a B+/A- for that one in my writing class [Y][Y]

I suspect the admissions board will be duly impressed (if they bother to read your essay). Where did you apply, if I might ask?

Can’t think of a better way to show off the skills that a good student should have (patience, determination, willingness to research, discipline) than you’ve demonstrated here.

As Boyd mentions be sure to go back through and read it again and proof it (don’t rely on the auto-spell check) for grammar and spelling. (For example you have one place where you say “tough” when you mean “taught” [;)] ).

Nicely done! [B]

Thats a good essay. That is going to be for sure an A.

Yes. As I tell my students REPEATEDLY (and it mostly falls on deaf ears…)

PROOFREAD, PROOFREAD, PROOFREAD… then have someone else (that’d be us I guess [;)]) proofread it for ya…

Keep up the good work and the good writing!

PS If you want some technical advice - other than the grammar error Bill noted - watch for places where you change the tense within the same sentence or paragraph (from present to past, for example). Also, you’ve written using a lot of passive voice, which is common, but should be avoided. Still, like I said, this essay is a pretty darn good piece of writing and, compared to many of the college students I deal with daily, is well above the norm.

Thank you for demonstrating the art and beauty of the written word.

Such a pleasure to see in the internet/twitter influenced world of today.

I guess I’d grade more harshly than Boyd.

If enthusiasm were graded, you’d do exceptionally well.

Grammatically, there are numerous errors, especially in the use of punctuation. Check the rules on colons and semi-colons, watch out for overuse of quotation marks and parentheses. I’d give it a high C low B based on that. As mentioned, there are several word that spell-check let slide that are not the correct word for the context, though they are spelled correctly.

“And even when I do return to my X-acto knife and airbrush, I cannot guarantee that my own children will be as passionate for the hobby as I was when I was their age.” This is a very awkward sentence…you start out talking about your eventual and possible return to the hobby, then shift to what the hobby may mean to your future children.

BeltFed, this is one good essay to read. I guess I could be the one speaking here or any modeller, be a master or an amateur. You have in your essay, gave the picture of the modeller as he is now. Great piece! Congratulations!

Thank you everyone for your kind words and nitpicking. Like i stated, this was only a rough draft and i encourage you to point out any errors/ confusing/ awkward wording!

Excellent writing,much appreciated comments and observations.

Oh! I missed the part that this was a draft. Somehow I thought it was one you sent in already. Well, good, you have some time to improve it.

Proofread, my friend. Then edit. Then proofread, then edit. Then repeat…[;)]